Synthesis Chart + Research Questions

1) How Old Are You?
2) How important is education to you on a scale of 1-10
3) Do you know anybody who is or was homeschooled?
4) Have you been in any type of experience with home-schooling?
5) Would you say that somebody who is homeschooled is at a disadvantage in terms of future success when compared to people who are not homeschooled?

How do I insert an excel sheet?

HOW IS IMRAD DIFFERENT PLUS TOPIC PROPOSAL.

The IMRAD report is different from an argument based research paper I have done in the past for many reasons. One reason in which it is different is that the IMRaD report is split up in a very unique way. Up until now, my research papers followed a very general and not really specific approach. Whereas, the development and design of the IMRaD are very specific.
The IMRaD paper is also different because it dives further into physically researching a topic, within the IMRaD report, I am not simply finding data online for my argument but I am doing the research myself.

I'm writing on the topic of special education, this should seem interesting since i researched it before.
Research q 1) How your experience with special education influenced your success in the future
Research q 2) Did you take any special ed courses in high school?

I'm going to interview people and ask them whether or not they were in special education, then I am going to ask my question regarding how special education influenced their success in college or in the future?

Analysis and Outline

Commercial: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=91LQWQEyD8w

Analysis:


Outline

Intro: The widely known "Somebody's Watching Me" theme is played to two scenes; the first one features a basketball player, and the second one a man at a diner.           

           Hook: do you remember all the different and funny geico commercials from the past? They approach selling insurance in a very unique way. In the past they have includedcavemen, a lizard and a catchy song. The song is the most familiar aspect of their past commercials for me.

Thesis: The following commercial from 2009 has a specific purpose and is quite effective. The purpose is to use humor to sell insurance using humor. The commerical is somewhat effective in promoting their ideas. 

Purpose: the commercial is trying to use comedy to advertise their insurance company.

Transition 1

the commercial is aimed towards promoting GEICO's insurance company. It is quite clearly an advertisement. I noticed towards the end that they were trying to sell something to me. The familiarity Of the commercial made it clear that they are trying to sell insurance.
In one scene, a dude is shooting a basketball and the music starts playing from a wad of cash.

Effectiveness: the commercial is effective in maintaiining the audiences attention, and promoting their idea.

Transition 2

The commercial is somewhat effective at selling insurance. I noticed a few things. For example the music kept me engaged within the commercial and would make me less likely to change the channel. It keeps me engaged which is quite effective. They also make it quite clear what they are trying to sell to me. The comedy of the ad can almost distract the audience from what they are trying to sell. I thought the two seperate scenes were really effective together within this commercial.
Conclussion:

Revision:

My first revision is actually the commercial I used. I changed the commercial so it within five years. In addition that it is significantly longer and allows me to add more details to my speech.
https://youtu.be/JyyJgAHXVHE

Intro:

What do most people think of when they here the company GEICO. It is almost the green lizard from a lot of their previous commercials. However, this commercial is different from the stereotypical “oh there’s a talking lizard to explain insurance to us.”

The one minute Geico commercial from 2018 has a specific purpose in which the Insurance company tries to use comedy and a relevant or recent event to promote their company. In a sense, the commercial isn’t intended to inform us of their policies but rather to keep their company fresh in our minds. The companies commercial does this with some effectiveness, as it certainly stuck in my mind.

Purpose

The GEICO commercial was created with a specific purpose in mind. The purpose of the commercial was to use that one overrated Stefon Diggs catch from the Playoffs last year.

The commercial starts out with the Minnesota Vikings WR Stefon Diggs in a sketch. Within this sketch he is trying to make a bowl of cereal. The cereal sticks to his hands, and is impossible to poor because everything sticks to Stefon Diggs hands. In the end he gets it done, overall the commercial is referencing how he never drops a ball and his game winning touch down against the saints. I personally believe he is overrated.

Also, it is important to note that the only words said that truly advertised the  insurance company was maybe five seconds at the end of the commercial where a narrator says ”believe it, geico could save you 15% or more on car insurance”. That alone makes it quite clear, that purpose of the commercial is not to inform the audience (people who are watching the tv)  of their policies. But rather the purpose, is to have the company just stick in the minds of the audience.

The comedic aspect of the commercial also hints to the purpose being an attention grabber. No serious commercial is going to include this sketch. Nobody thinks, lets make an overrated football player the star of our insurance commercial.

Effectiveness

The commercial is effective to a certain degree. The commercial is really effective at maintaining the audiences or viewers attention. The comedic aspect of the commercial helps make the commercial effective in terms of their purpose.

For example, the comedy truly adds to the commercial. In particular, the Stefon Diggs commercial it was funny and that can keep people from changing the channel or just immediately forgetting it right after.

What I thought that was not really effective in particular was that the commercial had no words within it, Nobody really talked until the very end of the commercial, which is when the narrator said for a few seconds “GEICO COULD SAVE YOU 15% OR MORE ON CAR INSURANCE”. If their purpose was to inform us about the insurance company they would have been very ineffective.

But rather, the commercial was a bit effective at somewhat effective at making us laugh and ensuring we remember the commercial. It is easier to associate a company with something positive when their commercials had made you laugh.

Conc.

In conclusion, the Insurance company tries to use comedy and a relevant or recent event to advertise their company. In a sense, the commercial isn’t intended to inform us of their policies but rather to keep their company fresh in our minds. The company is somewhat effective at fulfilling their purpose. Geico does a great job of using humor and current events to ensure the audience doesn’t change the channel.

Please provide comments on my paper

Please comment on my paper here:

Strengths and Weaknesses

Paper 1
Strengths:
1 Internal citations seem to be correct.
2 Used a variety of quotes from a credible source such as a professor
3 it is in the correct apa style
Weaknesses:
1 Giant paragraphs that could be shortened to increase readability
2 Uses the generic and basic transitions "first, next final"
3 Only uses the interview twice as evidence, interview was lacking
Paper 2
Strengths:
1 has a strong introduction, successfully introduces the topic etc
2 has a lot of evidence
3 evidence is essentially synthesized
Weaknesses:
1 internal citations are wrong and missing
2 quotes are just dropped into the essay. does not explain the quotes well
3 very few sources listed on citation page
Paper 3
Strengths:
1 strong introduction introduces topic and what creative writing means to them
2 good in text citations
3 elaborates on how creative writing in academic writing is different than in non academic writing
Weaknesses:
1 conclusion is weak
2 I don't know if the interview was necessarily included
3 repetitive. The entire paper feels very repetitive
Paper 4
Strengths:
1 strong transitions
2 reference page is in the appropriate APA style
3 ideas and thoughts are thoroughly explained
Weaknesses:
1 just dumps quotes into paragraphs
2 does not really use interview
3 hard to read/ low readability( not thought out well)
Paper 5
Strengths:
1 strong introduction and conclusion
2 transitions helps readability
3 uses a lot of evidence
Weaknesses:
1 some grammar and spacing errors
2 does a poor job when explaining evidence
3 does not really use interview
Paper 6
Strengths:
1 introduction catches my attention and maintains it
2 organization helps readability
3 Uses the APA style for their evidence
Weaknesses:
1 person who they interviewed does not really relate to his major
2 some of his evidence is weird and grainy images
3 some of his evidence is poorly explained

3 Sources for my first major writing assignment.

3 Academic Sources
Source #1: http://proxy.lib.uiowa.edu/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=afh&AN=125089080

My first source is an article from an academic journal called "American Secondary Education". The writer of the article is also the editor for this academic journal. The genre of this source would be Secondary Education. The article talks about secondary education, the way students are taught in America and students reactions to the way they are taught. I could use this source as a way to add some credibility to my paper, and as a way to explain how high schoolers are taught.

Source #2: http://proxy.lib.uiowa.edu/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=afh&AN=76119137

My second source is an article from the academic journal "History Teacher". This article talks about how a certain history subject is taught by giving a detailed lesson plan. The genre of this source would probably be secondary education and history. It gives useful insight into how some high school history classes are set up. I could use this article to analyze a typical high school history lesson plan.

Source #3: http://proxy.lib.uiowa.edu/login?url=https://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=afh&AN=24563364

My third source is another study or article from the academic journal "History Teacher". The author uses a study of twenty high school history teachers within the article. The study allows the author to conclude what would be the best way to teach history to high schoolers. The article would be under an education and history genre because it is an article that describes teaching practices. I could use this article to further elaborate what a good secondary educator does in order to teach history.