There are a few problems that you may improve in your paper. First, you suggested that homeschooling is very important because a large percentage of Americans know very little to noting about homeschooling. This does not make homeschooling important. You may list some advantages of homeschooling. Also, you assumed that people knew little about homeschooling, but you didn't provide any evidence on that. In-text citations is another problem that you may improve. In the introduction, you mentioned Brian Ray's study in 1997. You may try to provide more information on that. You had a very comprhensive introduction that covered much. However, you may improve your transition between sections. Adding one or two sentences towards the end of the intro about why you havve chosen to do this study may help. Besides, in the results part, the topic of Figure 1 didn't match the question provided in your questionnaire(and you may also want to be more careful when you do screenshots, since there was even a website at the corner of Figure 1 :) Another problem is that your survey didn't reveal how homeschooled students' social skills actually were. Instead, it revealed how the students thought of the problem. T improve this, you may ask them some questions about the frequency they took part in activities and the number of friends they had.
There are a few problems that you may improve in your paper. First, you suggested that homeschooling is very important because a large percentage of Americans know very little to noting about homeschooling. This does not make homeschooling important. You may list some advantages of homeschooling. Also, you assumed that people knew little about homeschooling, but you didn't provide any evidence on that.
ReplyDeleteIn-text citations is another problem that you may improve. In the introduction, you mentioned Brian Ray's study in 1997. You may try to provide more information on that.
You had a very comprhensive introduction that covered much. However, you may improve your transition between sections. Adding one or two sentences towards the end of the intro about why you havve chosen to do this study may help.
Besides, in the results part, the topic of Figure 1 didn't match the question provided in your questionnaire(and you may also want to be more careful when you do screenshots, since there was even a website at the corner of Figure 1 :)
Another problem is that your survey didn't reveal how homeschooled students' social skills actually were. Instead, it revealed how the students thought of the problem. T improve this, you may ask them some questions about the frequency they took part in activities and the number of friends they had.